Byzantine Cross

I write like a movie screen writer and wanted to work on my short story type. Can you give criticism please?
(i have no writing experiences and i made this up on the spot. Improvisation). Judment is a supernaturl being...
As Judgement rose up on his strong legs, the citizens of Byzantine began to shudder, they began to tremble at the sight of such a magnificent phantasm. Now, the humble servants of Judgement had faces of gloom and guil, for they too were conspirators in the plot against Judgement to usurp his throne and power. All fell & woshiped him as a god and they dear not cross paths with him, fearing gor their lives. Despite their cowardly fear, the lowly servants woshiped Judgement, their every bloodthirsty word pleasing their masters ear, tickling it like a mother does her baby, causing the tainted ritual to reach completion. As the ritual continued for about a minute or so now, bright lights began to shine through the dark, damp floor that the worshipers sat upon. The lights were small at first, increasing in luminosity as the....
(i know little of literarature. Im just trying)
Your statements contradict each other.. They are afraid of him, yet are conspiring against him, although they acknowledge that they are human and he is a god? It just doesn't make much sense..
You might also have better luck if you picked a specific character to focus on, say an outsider onlooking the situation from a hidden point of view, or one of the denizens himself having doubts about what the conspirators have planned. Dialogue and details are two biggies in quality literature, as are character and plot development. If the characters have nothing driving them, there is no point for the story to take place. On the other hand, if there is no story taking place, there is no need to describe the characters. Each character should have some "alone time" with the audience to build personality and allow the characters to know more about them, however, this can be used the other way around and one specific character may be mysteriously secretive, with that quality being his character development. Of course later this would need to be fleshed out or explained, but these are just examples and ideas.
Basically, you need a compelling story and setting with smart characters who have natural conversations taking place over the course of the story. Stories whose dialogue are solely plot related are usually duds.. Having them talk about things that are going on in their universe makes the setting more believable and the characters more likable and three dimensional.
Also watch your spelling, there were quite a few places that I had to figure out what exactly you were trying to say because the words just didn't work. Good luck!
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